05-23-2006, 06:29 PM
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| One Very Hot Apple  Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Washington Age: 29
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My Mood:   | To Be As She to be as she the night falls as if slain by the sun, Slender beams of moonlight enter this darkened place entwined are we. The ethereal one wakens. Night shrouds her brooding form, an eternal wrath. Her ebon hair cascades over pale and tragic shoulders, and her full crimson lips part slightly, to taste the soul streaming from the pale flesh beneath her. Now a night of shared vitality, I remember her. Around, the sinister creatures gather. My dread grows as doom's scythe falls against my neck. It slays me, and darkly my vitae drips to the wicked earth that is my prison. In numbness I call her name while Death's shadow surrounds me. Now alone, my essence falls upon darkened eyes. This is her love the god for which i sacrifice myself flares once, then dies, swallowed by madness. all hope must not endure. her soul thrives no more. lost souls surround us, crying, save us from ourselves. always despairing, always lost, frozen here, waiting. Tortured forms wrought in panes of glass loom as dust dances in the air, forming an image in my mind, sparing not my exposed soul. Realization dawning on my face. I raise my head, now defying this oblivious reality.
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05-23-2006, 10:11 PM
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| Blow Pop of Doom  Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Missouri Age: 21
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My Mood:  | wow...thats awesome...i had to read it twice...i really like it!
__________________ “If people bring so much courage to this world the world has to kill them to break them, so of course it kills them. The world breaks every one and afterward many are strong at the broken places. But those that will not break it kills. It kills the very good, and the very gentle, and the very brave impartially. If you are none of these you can be sure it will kill you too, but there will be no special hurry.” - Ernest Hemingway |
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05-24-2006, 06:06 AM
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| Brandon 1st Blood, Part 2  Join Date: May 2005 Location: Missouri Age: 21
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My Mood:   | I like it, it sounds like it's about vamps, especially the "as the scythe falls upon my neck" part. It's sweet.
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05-26-2006, 04:27 AM
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| Mr. Furious  Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Washington Age: 28
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My Mood:  | sounds gothic, yet good at the same time. very poetic. good job hunny! btw= is bush the president of dog shit?
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05-26-2006, 05:06 AM
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| One Very Hot Apple Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Washington Age: 29
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My Mood: | thank you  yeah, its a bit gothic, but then again so is my brain in some ways...and yes! thank you for noticing my avatar! 
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